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This is my first attempt at witing a spell. Do you think this will work? can you give me some feedback?

Love spell

One white rose with the stem removed
One bowl of spring water
One red candle

Float the rose in the centre of the bowl of water. Light the candle. Recite the spell, while visualising the target. Warning: this is a powerful spell that blocks all counter spells and does not fade. Be careful while using this as it also binds the user of the spell to the one it is aimed at. Not only does this spell not fade, but it grows in power over time so use with extreme caution.
Purity of water;
Power of fire;
Beauty of the rose;
The lust of red;

As your beauty binds me;
May this flame;
Melt this wax;
To seal this deed;
Because from Hereon in;
We are bound together;
(Drip wax on rose)

With each other;
?Till the end of time;
With each other;
?Till the light and darkness combine;

With each other;
?Till East and West are one;
With each other;
After all else has gone;

Let no spell counter this;
And let none of our love go astray;
And our desire for one another;
Shall grow with each passing day;

From light, the darkness comes;
(Blow out candle)
And the deed is done;